Six Sentence Sunday – climax of ‘Un-brotherly love’

Hi everybody! This time, I just had to share a bit from a Roswell fanfiction story that I’ve been working on, just because I was getting to the big moment on Friday evening and having so much fun writing it!

He charged blindly on, but could feel the alien ooze covering him from head to toe, sealing him in – he couldn’t breathe through it, couldn’t open his eyes without the Gandarium blinding him, and that meant…

“Oooh, gross.” As Kyle collapsed, somebody else’s hands gently rubbed the worst of the ooze off his face, as his own badly tainted fingers wouldn’t have been able to do. That wasn’t enough, but a little bit at a time water was applied to wash away the rest of the residue over his eyes, and Kyle looked up gratefully at Liz Parker, his savior.

“Tess?” he croaked, and got something slimy inside his mouth, and gagged instinctively. He tried to spit, but couldn’t as long as his head was pointing up, so he turned over, and immediately felt more goo oozing onto his forehead, and his flesh crawled anew.


10 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – climax of ‘Un-brotherly love’

  1. Sue says:

    iky! and well done!


  2. Donna Hole says:

    I’ll just bet Liz doesn’t like being called Tess πŸ™‚ An interesting climax.



  3. Eek! Poor guy! I loved your snippet, I hope you will give us more next week! πŸ™‚


  4. Steven says:

    Nice description!


  5. Ruthie Knox says:

    Hah, fun! I love how it starts all dramatic, but then Liz is so casual. Good quality in a savior. And then the way the ooze keeps coming after him is great, too — visceral and interesting and fun.


  6. EUGH!! *Gags* πŸ˜‰


  7. Debra S. says:

    Very nice! Thanks for sharing.


  8. Okay, as an obsessive hand-washer (can’t even stand food on my hands when I’m cooking), this is seriously a scene from my nightmares…


  9. Oh gross! But well done.


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