Six Sentence Sunday – more from ‘Children’


Good morning, everybody, and happy Six Sentence Sunday. I’m going to continue from last week’s excerpt, and just to make one point of background clear – Odin is the ship’s computer, not a human being.

“Yes, I did,” Melanie told Odin. “Including the part where you told us about the contraceptives that are in use on Santa Maria, fed into the food and water, which are absolutely one hundred percent effective?”

“That is indeed successful at suppressing conception within a margin of one in ten million when administered at the proper dose,” Odin shot back. “But it would be foolish of you to assume that the ship-wide mass dosing would continue indefinitely without a halt. There must be a resumption of births to maintain a stable population level on board ship.”

 “Well, that makes sense,” I said, squeezing Mel’s hand as reassuringly as I could.

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22 Responses to Six Sentence Sunday – more from ‘Children’

  1. Ruthie Knox says:

    Cocky computer! Great six.

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  2. Sue says:

    computer with attitude – love it – thanks for your comment and have a great holiday!

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  3. A very interesting premise for a story. I hope Melanie doesn’t mind contributing to the ship’s population!

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  4. Guilie says:

    Hahahahaha… Agreed, Sue–love the ‘puter’s attitude here. And incontrovertible logic. Is Mel pregnant? That’ll put a new spin on things, won’t it?

    Thanks for sharing, and I’m glad you posted anyway, even if you missed the deadline 🙂

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  5. To be exact, the birth rate must equal the death rate. Interesting problem for the computer to figure the dose accurately.

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  6. Cate Masters says:

    Sounds like a terrible world aboard ship. Intriguing six.

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  7. I’m pretty sure my computer talks to me that way. Or maybe I just think it does after I’ve been writing for hours… intriguing sex!

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  8. K.E. Saxon says:

    I love the dilemma here. Great teaser! Can’t wait to see what happens next! Happy Holidays to you.

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  9. The totalitarian implications are really neat. Having that as the backdrop and reasoning for such an intimate moment/problem is awesome and chilling. I enjoyed it.

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  10. With my affinity for statistics, I think I just developed the hots for Odin….

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  11. I love this. Very intriguing.

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  12. Great six. Sounds like an interesting read!

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  13. Heather Boyd says:

    Intriguing six. Feels like there is a kicker coming tho. :o)

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  14. Lynne Murray says:

    Hmm, so long as the computer agrees…. definite foreboding feeling about the future here. Suspenseful six!

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  15. So what the computer is saying is that birth control is not 100% effective? LOL. Great six.

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  16. Cherie Marks says:

    Oh infallible computer, I think you got some more explaining to do.

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  17. jennajaxon says:

    Why am I flashing on books like Brave New World and 1984? A world ruled by the computer is not my cup of tea. Especially not a snarky one. Great six, though. 🙂

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  18. Zee Monodee says:

    Love the vibe in this one – the fate of millions not in their hands. Very ominous, and chilling too since Odin is a machine! 🙂 Great job, I enjoyed this excerpt. Looking forward to more snippets from you on coming Sundays

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  19. pippajay says:

    Ooo, so the ship’s computer gets to decide that? Dodgy!

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  20. Cool. I love artificial intelligence with personality.

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  21. Great six! a good set up for more 🙂

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