Hello friends, followers, and fellow Six Sentence Sunday-ers. Thanks for all the great thoughts last week, and once again, I’m moving to a new piece! ‘The Snow Job’ is finished, yay! I’ve started a new manuscript to finish off November, and I may need to do some revision on it soon, because I want to submit sample chapters for it to the CSSF Novel Writer’s workshop in Kansas next year. So I’d love to hear what you all think about the opening scene!
Kinwer tried to look like he was actually about to do morning chores all the way through his father’s north wheat field. Once he was next to the fence he checked back at the farmhouse to see if any of his family was watching, ducked between the rails, waded across the stream, scrambled across the rocky ground and around the hill, and stopped at a mound of earth about as tall as his father. “Hello, Gibbs – I’m here.”
There was no answer. Kinwer circled around the mound, so that he was even less likely to be spotted by anybody from the farms near the village. He wanted to be patient for Gibbs’ sake, but he couldn’t wait here long.
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Sneaky Kinwer. I can totally relate to the ‘pretending to work’ situation. The body is pretending to do one thing, when the mind is busy doing another. A great six all in all. xx
I hope his sneaking around is worth it. 😉 Nice six!
Well it’s certainly piqued my curiosity.Who is Gibbs? Very nice six and great opening paragraph.
Was this from the opening scene — or is it the opening sentences on the first chapter?
Nice six either way.
It’s the opening scene and the opening sentences on the first chapter – thanks!
Now who (or what) is he waiting for?