Weekend Writing Warriors – Time Bubble Blues #1


Hey everybody! I’m really excited about the new Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop meme, inspired by Six Sentence Sunday. While there are lots of similarities between the two, WeWriWa appears to have a slightly more laid-back attitude so far, and it pushes the content up to eight sentences. So, here’s my first WeWriWa snippet, from the start of my short story “The Time Bubble Blues.”

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The clock on Jack’s bedside table clicked and started to play “Can’t Buy Me Love” from a plug-in memory chip. Jack groaned, testing how stiff his bones were, and smiled. He’d be going to his daughter’s birthday party today.

After using the bathroom, and checking on how full the toilet tank was, Jack went over to his desk, settled himself in the padded armchair, and woke up his computer. The ‘time bubble clock’ program that he’d written himself showed that it was eight-thirty in the morning by Jack time, but quarter after noon outside his bubble. He had most of an hour until Andrew came by to pick him up, so he opened a video course on whittling, rummaged around in the desk drawers to find a Swiss army knife and a few pieces of wood, and followed along with what the teacher was doing.

Jack had carved a reasonably good bear when he noticed how long he’d been whittling.

Five minutes ago there should have been loud chimes to let him know that the time bubble had collapsed and the door wasn’t sealed.

Thanks for reading, everybody – please comment if you enjoyed it and visit http://www.wewriwa.com/ to find some more great writers!

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12 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Time Bubble Blues #1

  1. Sherry Ellis says:

    That’s a great start! Thanks for sharing!

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  2. Intriguing snippet. It makes me ask a lot of questions–the kind that would compel me to continue reading. Ominous last sentence! Good 8. 🙂

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  3. Shell Flower says:

    This is a fascinating world. You give us a lot to be fascinated by in these few sentences. Great beginning.

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  4. Sara Barnard says:

    I used to love to whittle!! Love the excerpt … great visuals 🙂

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  5. Elin Gregory says:

    Grand start with faulty tech. Nice snippet.

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  6. Very intriguing, I’m caught up in the time bubble idea and definitely wanting to know more about this story. Excellent excerpt!

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  7. AJ Bradley says:

    Huh, interesting…why didn’t it work? Is he gonna be late for his daughter’s party? Or is something else going on? Looking forward to answers!

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  8. I have so many questions! Why did he need to check how full the toilet tank was? What does it mean that the door is unsealed? Lot’s more in-between. I’m going to keep reading.

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  9. Marie says:

    I like the Jack time reference, gives him a sense of identity in a very short amount of time.

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  10. Kate Warren says:

    Interesting. I’m curious about the time bubble and what purpose it serves.

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  11. Gem Sivad says:

    Talk about leaving me hanging. I’m already hooked!

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  12. Debbie says:

    I back-tracked here from the Feb. 18 snippet. This is incredibly intriguing! Good stuff.

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