Weekend Writing Warriors – Time Bubble Blues 12

Good morning! I think these are the last eight sentences I’m going to share from ‘Time Bubble Blues.’ Next week, I’ll move on to something new, possibly fresh snippets from “The Aurigae Express.” So I’m going to skip ahead out of the flashback with Mindy and show Jack still trying to think his way out of the box.


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Using the schematics for the TimeBubble room on his computer, Jack was able to find the Master Panic Button circuits, which were hidden in a metal box attached to the ceiling. Jack unscrewed the side panels of the box, and examined the control board. He wasn’t an electronic engineer, but nothing in the circuit seemed to be damaged, and all the right indicators were glowing green: POWER, NETWORK, WIRELESS, and STANDBY FOR SIGNAL. Jack fished out the Panic Button hanging from his belt, and stuck his thumb down on it, hard. The indicators for WIRELESS SIGNAL ACTIVE and RELAY lit up, just as they were supposed to.

And still the door didn’t open.

What was the next step in the process? The Panic Button Circuit relayed to the time warp controls, to collapse the bubble.

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8 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Time Bubble Blues 12

  1. Gemma Parkes says:

    Hm, sounds like he’s got a bit of a puzzling problem there! Love your imagery.


  2. Nice #8Sentence. Leaves the hero still in a situation trying to puzzle his way out. Nicely done.


  3. Now that’s a problem. Nice excerpt.


  4. I love this story! Today was another logical, enjoyable advance in the action – great snippet!


  5. Elaine says:

    I loved how much I learned about your MC from his thought processes and his preoccupation with detail. I wonder what will happen next? Something unexpected and time-consuming? 😉


  6. A circuit board rather than a chip? Well, a circuit board would be easier to puzzle out, though still not easy.


  7. Beth Camp says:

    Don’t know the story, but I saw lots of action here. Liked the way you integrated the back story in (Jack’s not an electronic engineer). What I missed was any strong emotional reaction, worry, self doubt? He’s pretty much saying, “Duh, wonder why this thing isn’t working.” I also wondered what era the story’s set in, whether the technology itself (computer) looks back instead of forward (time warp). Would people in the future have a different word/device than computer? Nicely inevitable ending.


  8. Oh my… I hope he gets himself out of this mess. And it makes me sad that you’re going to leave us hanging with it…


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