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Continuing to share the new revision of “Gotta Have That Look,” about teenagers and genetic injections. I’ve shared some from an early draft with Six Sentence Sunday, but this is mostly a new plot. I’m going to skip over some classroom stuff. I’m going to skip ahead a little; Jimmy’s friends, Bryan and Stephanie, are trying to help him figure out what kind of ‘look’ would impress Diane.
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“Last month, she went to a bunch of Diskball dances with Murry Hanson, didn’t she?”
“Just two, on the ninth and the twenty-fourth,” Bryan said.
“Murry had dark skin then,” Stephanie added, and Jimmy began typing. “His build was very muscular, with dark brown hair, though he cut it between dances. A little taller than average, and he moved the skin-tone up by two shades the last week of the month. Maybe that’s why Diane didn’t go near him again.” Stephanie caught Bryan’s eyes. “So I notice things about guys.”
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People would never be done with themselves would they? I have a few things I’d like to work on. 🙂
I like the odd premise of this story. Man, insecure teens would tweak till there was no tomorrow.
Interesting Bryan knew the exact dates of the dances Diane went to. Stephine could have given Bryan that odd look too! Jimmy has great spies. 🙂
(No snippet for me this week. 🙂 )
Stephanie knows stuff! I like your characters.
Interesting approach he’s got going now. Fascinating snippet!
I wonder what she notices about guys.
Is two shade of skin tone enough to put that girl off? If that’s the case she might not be really worthy to go out with.
I’m brand new to this blog and your writing, and I am totally intrigued by this snippet. GREAT one to share. I’m going to have to go read the other ones now…
First time here, as far as I can recall (pretty stressed right now) but I’m totally intrigued by this snippet. Sounds like it has sci-fi undertones, and that’s what I write, so COOL. I want to read more, and I will be back. Thanks for visiting today.
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Hmmm. Sounds like a very unique concept. So these teens are trying to genetically change their looks? Sounds like it could cause a lot of problems. I enjoyed the snippet!
Stephanie’s fun, I like her chatter : )