Welcome friends, followers, and Weekend Writing Warriors!
Thanks for all the great comments on ‘Return to Civilization!’ But I’m going to switch to one of the rough drafts that I was working on in Nano this year. This is from the scene where Gordon, my MC, is meeting Vanessa for dinner; he met her at the Earthling chamber of commerce a few scenes earlier.
“Hey, Gordon, you’re here already!”
I looked up to see Vanessa, dressed in a bright red dress with a miniskirt hem, long sleeves, and a high collar, with little cut-outs around the shoulder. She had her hair gathered up into a poufy tail behind her head. “Um, yeah, I wanted to get here early to scout out the place by myself,” I admitted, and checked the chrono on the table menu. “You thought you’d be the first to get here early?”
She chuckled. “Yeah, I guess so. Gordon Wyatt, I’d like you to meet Doomah.”
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Doomah? Intriguing with the description of a pretty girl and then. . .What happens next? Good eight.
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Hmmm…who is Doomah? And why did she bring Doomah along? I love the description of her hair. Good 8! 🙂
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Doomah’s got me intrigued as well, great description of the heroine and what she’s wearing! Excellent excerpt…
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Great character description, could be an awkward moment?
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Interesting. Sounds fun. Looking forward to more glimpses next week.
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Why does everyone want to get there early? Simple nervousness, or sinister plans? o.O
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Certainly sounds as if she had to think of a plausible reason for getting there early – makes me wonder why she has this Doomah with her. Very intriguing.
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I, too, was like, “Who is Doomah??” So i guess I must wait to find out. 🙂
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Is Oomah human?
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