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This week, I’m continuing with the sample chapters of my unfinished Nano. Gordon is surprised to be out to dinner with a beautiful girl and her alien sweetie, and things aren’t getting any easier for him! I’m skipping ahead a little in the scene, over the food talk. Gordon and Vanessa get a little bit of awkwardness out of the way, while Doomah the alien stays quiet.
“Is it okay if I ask you more personal questions?”
“Yeah, but can I sneak one in first?”
“Is it about Doomah?”
I nodded, not quite sure how to phrase it.
“Yes ,we’re… well, in the Libran fashion, we’ve declared an intent to become life partners. In Earthling terms, I guess you could say we’re engaged.”
“Oh–I just wanted to know if Doomah was–a he or a she. Sorry, I know that they do have gender more or less the same way we do, but blast me if I can tell the difference.”
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Intriguing little story, I’m looking forward to the answer to the Doomah question, although somehow I have the feeling there won’t be a straightforward response LOL. Great snippet!
I love how candid this exchange is. Perhaps on Doomah’s world, there would be no awkwardness, but tapping into it from a human perspective–it adds all kinds of awkwardness.
“…but blast me if I can tell the difference.” Perfect! 🙂
I agree with Teresa, this exchange is nice and candid, there’s a realistic feel to this that doesn’t feel forced. It flows well and the last bit cracked me up about not being able to tell the difference.
It’ll be fun to see if she answers or if Doomah answers.
Could be a problem, all right.
They’re talking like this right in front of Doomah, right? That’s… kind of rude. But I guess if they do deal with gender like we do, and he can’t tell… he might as well ask.
This conversation is headed awkward places, I bet.
Better to ask than assume one thing and find out the opposite is correct. But just because they have genders doesn’t mean they have the same ones we do. The answer could be very interesting. Nice eight, Chris!
I hope Gordon’s going to get his comeupance for the rudeness there.