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This week, I’m continuing with the sample chapters of my unfinished Nano. Gordon is surprised to be out to dinner with a beautiful girl and her alien sweetie, and he’s been telling them a bit of his family history…
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“Is that enough about my parents for now?”
Doomah barked quietly, (was that how Librans laughed?) and Vanessa nodded. “Certainly enough, especially if you’re talked out.”
“How did the two of you meet?”
“I was working at town hall,” Vanessa said, “and he was a protester, occupying the town hall as part of a stunt that was designed to get us to all leave the planet or something.”
My mouth dropped open for a second. “Really?”
“I was young and foolish,” Doomah explained, “afraid of what would become of our beloved planet if we started inviting lawless aliens to live among us.”
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Interesting snippet, i like the description of his laugh!
Somehow not what I expected, which is always a fun thing – great snippet!
Sounds like she’s changed her mind since.
I’m still wondering where all of this is heading…
The lawless alien comment is kind of funny actually seeing as an alien is sitting there. 🙂
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Okay, I realize this wasn’t clear, but the ‘lawless alien’ comment was actually spoken by Doomah, the Libran, talking about Earthlings and other visitors to the planet. Sorry about that!
Yeah, I’m not sure I’d trust us humans, either. Have you seen our track record for colonization? We tend to be terrible to the land and the natives.
I love the parenthetical thought–a glimpse of what Gordon’s thinking, and a nice hint for the reader to what the sound probably means.