Weekend Writing Warriors – Crossed Wires 3

Welcome friends, followers, and Weekend Writing Warriors!

Okay, I’m going to switch to another of the new stories I wrote this summer. This was also inspired by one of my A-Z challenge ideas: Neural Rewiring. Nathan is the leader of a stunt aerobatics flying team, and the team is practicing.


Snippet 1 Snippet 2

Liz’s plane roared and seemed to jerk upward, maintaining altitude and putting on speed as it roared above the runway.

Nathan watched as she looped around to the end of the line and landed after Seth, not really as close as the others had been but if there had been an audience, they might not have noticed the difference. “Liz, as thrilling as that variation is, I’m not sure it’ll be a crowd-pleaser.”

“You were the one crowding her, Nathan!” Karen shot back. She’d been in the plane in front of Nathan for the landing, so she would know. Nathan’s stomach sank a little. If he’d been too far back from Karen’s plane, Liz wouldn’t have been able to come in for a safe landing without passing the danger on to Niko, and so on. It had been a split-second emergency, she’d made the right call, and Nathan hadn’t even noticed.

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6 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Crossed Wires 3

  1. Gemma Parkes says:

    Frustrating and so realistic, people often don’t notice the reason we do things! Great snippet.


  2. You’ve been so prolific with the new stories! That’s great…enjoyed the excerpt, an interesting set of characters.


  3. caitlinstern says:

    Always sad to know you did something so wrong you could’ve killed people! Love all the details here, you can see the planes coming in.


  4. K. (@ScrivK) says:

    Well, Nathan get’s nicely put in his place! One thing I noticed, you use ‘roar’ twice in that first sentence. It might be stronger if you use another word for what you are portraying. Good snippet.


  5. Christina Ochs says:

    Loving the descriptions interwoven with the bit of conflict here. Such an interesting subject matter, too. Great eight!


  6. Tut, tut Nathan. Snipper makes me wonder what’s going on between Nathan and Liz….


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