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Well, I take a week off from WWW for TNEO stuff, but here’s more sentences the first draft of “The Gnomes are Missing.” I hope you enjoy them. Last time, two weeks ago, Kinwer and Trish preparing for their quest.
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The dwarf handed him a light wooden stick, maybe five feet long.
“Don’t try to use this stick as a club or staff in a fight unless there’s no other choice; it’ll snap into pieces on the first solid hit. Have you any experience with arms, human child? I imagine you’ll have a chance to learn with the goblins, before you’re done, hmm.”
He went to a rack of weapons in the corner and pulled off a sword, holding it with both hands.
“I suppose this would do as a short sword for you. It doesn’t look like much, but it’ll hold an edge; needs some sharpening, but that’ll give you a chance to get familiar with her.”
The dwarf immediately started in on a long lecture about how to care for swords; not just sharpening, but how to clean it when you got blood or other gore on the blade, how to oil it and so on.
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Nice! This line is just plain old delightful: “Have you any experience with arms, human child?” I think throwing that “human child” in there really pulls the reader in. I like this dwarf character, and I think his slightly clipped speech really works!.
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First off, I had a hard time figuring out how to comment on your blog. I’m glad I found the way. This was an intriguing clip. I like the way the dwarf handed out the weapon and the wording. Calling him a human child was also intriguing. It might be fun to hear the long lecture in dwarf style. Well done.
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Loving this gnome, he’s too cute.
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OK then, the dwarf doesn’t mince words or waste time! I wonder if your character is taking in all this instruction LOL. Terrific snippet!
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