Welcome friends, followers, and Weekend Writing Warriors!
Continuing to share the new revision of “Gotta Have That Look,” about teenagers and genetic injections. I’ve shared some from an early draft with Six Sentence Sunday, but this is mostly a new plot. There isn’t much about the novum of teenagers changing their looks in this snip; Jimmy has gone over to talk to his dream girl, Diane.
Diane lifted one eyebrow. “Morning, Jimmy. What’s up?”
“I was wondering if you wanted to go with a movie to me–tonight.”
“Thanks so much for asking, but no, I don’t think so.”
“Okay . . . Something else maybe, later this week?”
“No, thanks–do you mind?” She waved the pencil at her sketch pad. “I’m trying to get this finished before first period.”
Visit the other Weekend Writing Warriors at http://www.wewriwa.com/.
The Kelworth Files 
Ouch, poor boy. Nice 8.
LikeLike
Ouch! I can feel his nervousness.
LikeLike
I can tell by the second line the boy is super nervous the way he stumbles all over his words. Clever way of showing that. 🙂
History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders
LikeLike
At least she was polite. I hope he tries again…excellent excerpt.
LikeLike
Sounds like he needs to be interested in what she’s doing.
LikeLike
Great job with his nerves. Also, I love the title!
LikeLike
Shot down! The question is–is she just being polite because she’s nice, or does he stand a chance if he smartens up. He should know better that to ask for a last minute date–or a vague ‘something.’
LikeLike
Ouch, what a brush off.
LikeLike