Good morning! Here are your next eight sentences from ‘Time Bubble Blues.’ At this point, we’ve jumped back into another flashback of Jack and his family, from when he was getting ready to go to his TimeBubble room for the first time.
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“Grandpa, will you come with us to the park on Saturday?” Mindy asked him. Jack looked up and saw her standing in the doorway. “I’m gonna start as goalie for the first time.”
“No, sweetie, I’m sorry.” Jack turned back to the screwdrivers he was packing, and thought about how many screws he’d need. “But your brother’s birthday is in three weeks, and I’ll see you then.”
“Yeah, I know. You’re going to be coming to birthday parties for a long, long time, but we’re not going to see you at all, except for that.”
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This is such an emotional story. Love this snippet and the disappointment in the granddaughter’s tone. Loving this story.
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I really like the granddaughter’s disappointment. Makes me wonder how very often grandpa has let her and his family down.
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So is he still trapped or did that issue get resolved? I’m loving this story, so unusual! Terrific snippet!
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Wow- you nailed the sad disappointment of the girl. Nicely done.
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Wonder if he’s ever going to make another birthday party.
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What a heartbreaking thing for a granddaughter to realize! My heart breaks for them! I cannot wait to read more! Thanks 🙂
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Poor little girl. I felt her disappointment.
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I’ve loved time travel stories ever since Heinlein’s The Door Into Summer. I can’t wait to read all of this! The emotional impact of all you lose when/if you do this is staggering. What do you gain vs what you will miss. Heartbreaking.
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Poor kid. I hope he truly understands what he and his family will be missing out on.
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😦 So much disappointment. This is my first time here and I’m looking forward to reading more of your excerpts.
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Reminds me to value the mundane moments in life, because I’m lucky enough to share them with my loved ones.
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I feel bad for Mindy.
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Simple but compelling, keep going!
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I so love the premise of the story! I’m hooked on seeing how this plays out. See you next week!
(No snippet for me this week.)
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